Claire's Writer Workshop

Wednesday, November 15, 2006

WA 5, Draft 1: Finding Unusual Treasure

As she walked into class on the first day of school, Melanie’s, eyes were drawn away from her book, by the smell of marshmallows roasting. When she looked up she was so intrigued by the person standing before her that she had to pinch herself to make sure she wasn’t dreaming. As she scanned the room to make sure she was in the right place she noticed the name Ms. Hill written on the blackboard.

This classroom was unlike any other, not to mention the teacher. As Melanie quietly slipped into a desk she noticed that she wasn’t the only one confused as to where this teacher came from. Melanie tried not to be rude and tried to go back to reading her book but as her beady blues peered over the cover what she saw was astonishing. Lining the normally dull brick room were posters covering every square inch of the walls. The most interesting thing though was the treasure chest that sat right in the middle of the room.

“Quiet, please,” Ms. Hill said as the second bell rang.

The class became immediately quiet, although it had been merely whispers that broke the silence in the air as the students came through her door. Ms. Hill stood at the front of the room in a leopard print jumpsuit with bright red glasses outlining the circular shape of her face. As she waved her hands around the room, Melanie noticed the gold, sparkly gloves that encased her slender hands and the many bracelets that wrapped like vines up her arms. Scanning Ms. Hill from toe to head she suddenly came to the face. Her face resembled that of a lion. Blond, orange, and red curls streamed down her back like a mane. Large, round dark eyes surveyed the students as she looked around the room at her new subjects. The nose, however, drew the most attention, as well as the ears. The nose was stunted at the end like it had decided to stop growing years ago and the ears were as big as a monkeys and an unusual color, perhaps a result of the many colors she used to dye her hair.

The students introduced themselves in Ms. Hill’s style, which was to say your name backwards, imitate your favorite and animal and explain in another language why you are taking her class. After the were all finished introducing themselves, which took quite a while, Ms. Hills talked about herself. She was brief and very vague about her life, which made the students all the more confused yet interested. As the period came to an end she asked if there were any questions. Nobody raised their hand and so Ms. Hill began to write interesting facts about the world on her board.

Anna wasn’t sure if she wanted to raise her hand but she shyly reached her hand into the air, which she did not often do. Her fingers began to uncurl and Ms. Hill immediately whipped around from the notes she was writing on the board and pointed at Anna.

“I…I was wondering if you would mind telling us, what that treasure chest has inside,” Anna quietly said.

“It holds the treasures and secrets of the world.”And with that the bell rang.

1 Comments:

Blogger Daniel said...

hahaha this so funny and random

the end is intriguing, but I can't really give you feedback unless you tell me... what writer did you pick?

1:36 PM  

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